Saturday, October 20, 2012

Spooktacular Pitch #36: TEMPLE FALLS

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Genre: MG Fantasy
Word Count: 50,000 words

3 line Pitch:

After thirteen year old Nara is banished from the palace, the last thing she should care about is saving her people, especially while still mourning the death of her father. But the former princess is the only one who can hear the Gods, and those Gods are angry. As devastating plagues continue to batter the kingdom, Nara must decipher the Gods’ mysterious clues, stop the destruction, and save a kingdom that forsook her before she loses the only family she has left.

First 250:

Nara pushed her way through the soup of darkness. Her shoes clicked against the marble pathway towards the royal palace. Blackness covered her like a heavy cloak, weighing her down; even though it was only lunch time. The absence of daylight still gave Nara the creeps. It had been like this for three weeks.

But she knew how to fix it.

And she would tell her stupid cousin, even though he hardly deserved it. Anything was better than living under a dark cloud all day, every day.

It was strange coming to the palace without her maidens and royal guardsmen. But now that Nara and her mom were no longer palace residents, the entourage was gone.

The guardsman at the palace gate, a fellow by the name of Warner who Nara had known since birth, bowed his head slightly as he pushed open the heavy iron gate letting Nara inside. “Good day, Lady Nara,” he pronounced.

Nara, with a dismissive flick of her wrist said, “Day? Is that what this is? I can’t tell anymore.”

The oppressive darkness covering the kingdom of Chernadova indeed made it hard to tell day from night. For three weeks, since the death of Nara’s father, it was as if the Gods decided it would be a good idea to cover the kingdom with a large, dirty, dishrag. And every day the dishrag grew dirtier.

“Yes, my Lady. It certainly is a strange phenomenon.” Warner paused for a moment, shuffling his feet before continuing. “What do you make of this oddity?”

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