Saturday, October 20, 2012

Spooktacular Pitch #09: GLOWING SHADOW

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Title: Glowing Shadow
Genre: YA paranormal romance
Word Count: 81,000 words

3 line Pitch:

Seventeen-year-old empath Muriel thinks being a genius broadcasting her feelings to everyone is the biggest curse possible -- until she moves to Madrid. There, strange shadows hunt her; she’s rescued by a stubborn man who transforms into a glowing shadow. Now she has to convince him he deserves to love her while they discover why the shadows want her soul.

First 250:

Each time the girl stroked the picture, I struggled to breathe. Despair, desolation, and agony- they all tried to stop my heart. I’d picked the wrong seat again. She’s dressed in black and crying. I should have known.

Tears fell down my cheeks too. I knew that these weren’t my feelings, that I’d absorbed them from the girl, but I couldn’t stop them.

I opened a little the window, the cool air refreshed my cheeks and I inhaled the soft smell of snow. It didn’t help; they were still in me, growing every second.

In my purse was the little sock my mother knit for me when I was a baby. It was my talisman, filled with love and happiness. I took it and squeezed it between my hands.

I couldn’t think, only feel.

The pain was so strong, I needed it to stop. I stood and walked to the broken front door of the bus. It still hadn’t closed. The pavement fled by in front of me. I grabbed the roof handle and dangled, one foot out of the bus. Far away, I heard someone shouting. I inclined my body to jump. Something stopped me; I felt a pull on my arm and tried to focus on who was getting in the way, dragging me apart from relief. Through my tears, I spotted a man. His fear impinged upon me, lifting the fog in my mind.

What was I about to do? My hands shook. The man looked at me as if I was a freak. Well, he wasn’t wrong.

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