Tuesday, April 29, 2014

Team Magenta - The Unchosen One

Genre: MG Adventure


Word Count: 30,000 words

Song: “You’re the Best Around” by Joe Esposito

Pitch: 12yo Peter wants to be a hero—enough to believe he’s chosen to fight a crime organization known as The Invisible Arm. His naive, nerdy ambition could get him arrested, killed, or even worse…expelled.


Third Street wasn’t busy, but Peter’s sister chose the worst moment to chase after her baseball.

At first, Peter’s brain refused to let him move. He tried to warn her—tell her to look both ways, but his voice didn’t work. When Sally’s TOMS stepped from the curb onto the sizzling street, he began to hyperventilate. A pickup truck sped toward her, unaware of the helpless child in its path.

Peter couldn’t wait a second longer. His sister was about to share fates with the careless deer that littered the highway. He sprung forward, reached for Sally and raised the other arm like a traffic cop.

“Halt!” The word burst from his mouth as the overwhelming heat took his breath away. He shut his eyes and braced for impact. A deafening pop shot down Third Street. Burnt rubber and exhaust fumes drifted over Peter and Sally, but the truck didn’t follow.

Peter opened his eyes and released his breath. His pants were damp, but he did it. He saved his sister. Was he a hero? It was hard to tell, but yes, yes he was.

A skin-and-bones boy slammed the car door, scratched his peach fuzz and examined the flat tire.

“Perfect.” He wiped his forehead and spit. “First it’s the muffler, now it’s a tire—rusted old hunk of scrap metal. Why don’t you die already?”

Peter turned to Sally. “Are you okay?” She clutched her baseball with the ungloved hand and nodded, unsure if she believed herself.

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