Thursday, May 3, 2012

The Writer's Voice: Entry Number 31




The wonderful Brenda DrakeCupidMonica B.W., and Krista Van Dolzer are holding an amazing contest called The Writer's Voice. They're playing it like the NBC show The Voice. If I'm lucky, I could end up on one of their teams and with my coach's help, find an agent.

Thank you all for doing this contest!! You guys rock! Now for my entry:

Entry number: 31
Title: Spark
Genre: YA Paranormal Romance

Query:

It’s just like sixteen-year-old, Taisie Monahan, to fall flat on her face on the first day of her new school in her deceased mother’s hometown. When the popular clique in school accepts her into their group, she goes from zero to hottie in a flash, but their friendship comes at price.

When the nightmares stalking Taisie her entire life invade the real world, she finds solace in the arms of a mysterious biker boy. Soon Taisie learns she’s the missing piece to a centuries old prophecy and her new found friends will stop at nothing to make sure she fulfills her destiny.

A twisted cat and mouse game shows Taisie that the evil spectral who holds her mother’s soul will stop at nothing to get his hands on Taisie’s unharnessed ability to destroy immortality.

Forced to choose between her mother’s soul and her own freedom, Taisie must embrace her true identity and trust her new friends to save the ones she love or lose her soul forever.

SPARK is a young adult paranormal romance complete at 61,000 words.


First 250:

I knew he was there the moment my foot touched the sidewalk. That creepy-spider-crawling-up-your-back feeling was something that belonged only to him. My eyes searched the crowed frantically, hoping to get my first glimpse of my stalker before I realized what I was doing and stopped.

He was just another part of my endless nightmares. First day jitters had caused my nerves to play tricks on my mind and acting like a mess wasn't going to make my old rep of being freak-girl go away in this school any easier.

Pressing myself against a brick wall, I tried to catch a break from the sea of students flowing through the floodgates of Saint Isabel High. I'd never seen so many name-brand clothes in one place before. I took a step forward and then quickly returned to the safety of the wall.

Get a grip. People are staring.

I tried to will myself to listen, but the nagging feeling was still tugging at the edge of my mind, keeping me locked into place like a statue being held by chains.

Hey! Come here!” My breath caught when the hot jock yelled and waved at me, or what I wanted to be me. After all, didn't I try to make myself look like his type when I got up that morning?

My finger lightly swiped across my sorry excuse for lipstick, kicking up a slight hint of cherry from my lip balm, making me feel like a little girl in big girl clothing.


Thank you for this opportunity and good luck to everyone!!


33 comments:

  1. Hi Jamie, I'm stopping by from the Writer's Voice Contest to wish you the best of luck! I'm following your blog now too, so: nice to meet you.

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  2. Fellow entrant stopping by to say hi!

    Your entry looks great! Good luck!

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  3. Just popped in to say Good Luck!

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  4. Love the query - it sounds so creepy and cool! And the opening is great - I love the sense of dread in the opening lines!

    Good luck!

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  5. Wow. an ability to destroy immortality is definitely not something I've seen before. Good luck!

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  6. Good luck from one contestant to another!

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  7. Stopping by to wish you luck in the contest. I like your first 250! I also love the Alice in Wonderland quote at the top of your blog. ;)

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  8. As if the movie Jawbreakers wasn't frightening enough, you give the girl the ability to destroy immortality! That's great. I can't even imagine how much trouble can be caused in this story, but am very interested to find out.
    Once again, good luck!

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  9. Thank you everyone for you comments and good luck wishes! *passes cupcakes around* Wishing you all good luck in return!

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  10. Those are some serious stakes! Best of luck in the contest :)

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  11. I want you on my team! I'm a sucker for anything that smells like The Craft. I've read bits before and I know there's more to the clique and would want that to play a bigger roll in your query. If you're up to the challenge I'm going to through at you, please pick me. :D

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  12. Please ignore all typo errors. LOL

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  13. Oooohhh... a Brenda request! Congrats!!!!

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  14. Congrats! And thanks for the goodies. ;)

    Tina (#194)

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  15. Woo-hoo! A well-deserved request! Best of luck in the agent round!!!

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  16. I love your opening. Good luck, and congratulations :)

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  17. Congrats on getting picked! Your firs 250 stood out to me among the other entries - well done! Good luck as you continue!

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  18. Congratulations!!! Love the story!

    Good luck!!

    Summer - #40

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  19. Congratulations!! The story sounds incredible!

    Good luck!!

    Summer - #40

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  20. Congratulations! I would pick you for the cherry lip balm line alone! :)

    #23

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  21. Congrats on being chosen! ~Dahlia (#70)

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  22. Sorry it took me so long to get to you an offer my wishes for good luck (but you'll be pleased to know you aren't the last... or will you? :))
    I like your first 250. Attention grabbing.

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  23. I want to thank each and every one of you for your lovely comments!! They have made my day/night so many times! You are all wonderful talents and people. I'm so glad this community rocks so much! Love you all!!

    & Thank you, Brenda!! What typo? *looks away* ;)

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  24. Stopping by to wish you luck from another member of #TeamBrenda! Great job setting up the stakes! You've set up a lot of conflict in such a short space!

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  25. Good luck, James. BTW: when did you change the name of your book to SPARK? I'm so out of the loop here. Ugh!

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